This is a new poem that I thought would be a part of my chapbook but it is a first draft.
Done in four,
That was my promise
To myself.
Done in four,
Despite the fact
That it was intended for five,
That is what I did.
Done in four,
Means I graduate
With minimal liabilities and
at the age of 21.
Done in four,
That was my promise.
That is what I did.
Done in four,
I overloaded many terms
My grades suffered,
Yet I still have a 3.0.
Done in four
This is my last
And it is done.
Done in four
And then done
At least for a while.
Done in four
Then I leave
Protests aside.
Done in four
Slightly singed and
Drowsily awake.
Done in four
Ready for a break while
Acknowledging my affliction.
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The Done in Four message rings strongly throughout so I think repeating the phrase actually takes power away from beautiful language like slightly singed and drowsily awake. I know how hard college is and I really feel it in this poem. I think rearranging it somehow so that "and then done//at least for a while" was the last "stanza" would work wonderful because thats the true feeling we get on graduation "whew im done...now whats next" lol
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